there are some decent sounds in this, but it's very unmusical - discordant and everything seems to be operating in it's own key. You have some production skills - the beat is decent, but the actual music is missing and any sense of melody or tonality is not apparent.
maybe write techno - where this kind of thing is a little less important?
sorry for the harsh criticism, but have to be honest - work on the music.
and leave sean tayas out of this!
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Apr-27-2014 19:03
optik
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Registered: Jun 2004
Location: oxford
quote:
Originally posted by Raphie
Not sure what this is..
retro detroit house?
piano gets very repetitive after a minute or so of it, and whilst I like some of the sounds and effects peppered over the track, some I don't - be a bit more critical with what works and doesn't
not really my thing
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Apr-27-2014 19:07
PaULiN0
Twinkle, Twinkle..
Registered: Mar 2014
Location: Outer Space
quote:
Originally posted by optik
there are some decent sounds in this, but it's very unmusical - discordant and everything seems to be operating in it's own key. You have some production skills - the beat is decent, but the actual music is missing and any sense of melody or tonality is not apparent.
maybe write techno - where this kind of thing is a little less important?
sorry for the harsh criticism, but have to be honest - work on the music.
and leave sean tayas out of this!
No sorry I'm not writing techno, and please try not take my joke seriously okay?
Thanks.
Apr-27-2014 19:24
PaULiN0
Twinkle, Twinkle..
Registered: Mar 2014
Location: Outer Space
quote:
Originally posted by Storyteller
@optik: The theme doesn't really work for me. It feels too generic. The mixdown needs a lot of attention. The kick feels way too oldschool for the rest, I miss a lot of separation between sounds in the high end, it's one big mush.
+1
Apr-27-2014 19:32
optik
Supreme tranceaddict
Registered: Jun 2004
Location: oxford
quote:
Originally posted by PaULiN0
No sorry I'm not writing techno, and please try not take my joke seriously okay?
Thanks.
it's either that or take some music theory and practice lessons - I am right that you don't play an instrument aren't I?
I didn't say write techno to be rude, just that the genre you have attempted requires a certain amount of musicality - this can either be innate or you can learn it. I don't think you'd be arsed to learn it, so techno would be a good genre as it mainly needs good drums and bassline and requires less tonal musicality.
just trying to help
T
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Apr-27-2014 22:34
PaULiN0
Twinkle, Twinkle..
Registered: Mar 2014
Location: Outer Space
quote:
Originally posted by optik
it's either that or take some music theory and practice lessons - I am right that you don't play an instrument aren't I?
I didn't say write techno to be rude, just that the genre you have attempted requires a certain amount of musicality - this can either be innate or you can learn it. I don't think you'd be arsed to learn it, so techno would be a good genre as it mainly needs good drums and bassline and requires less tonal musicality.
just trying to help
T
Its my 2nd year in and I know about theory. Not all my instruments and synths have be in the same key. Some are and some aren't if you take another listen if you mind almost everything is spanning dif keys form one scale because I try to make it interesting as possible.. I listen to your stuff and you know you damn well sound everyone tries to sound like. Very generic, with hardly anything going on. You should try to make switch to europop no? its real simple . Um, sorry i dont want to sound harsh either but take it for my example. I still have a long way to go and its not there's a deadline and i need to switch genres immediately like you advised. I'm here to stay, thanks.
Apr-28-2014 16:07
junkproject
Supreme tranceaddict
Registered: Nov 2003
Location: Irvine
quote:
Originally posted by clay
thats horrible
I agree.
Apr-28-2014 18:18
PaULiN0
Twinkle, Twinkle..
Registered: Mar 2014
Location: Outer Space
quote:
Originally posted by junkproject
I agree.
Lets see you post something.
Apr-28-2014 18:24
optik
Supreme tranceaddict
Registered: Jun 2004
Location: oxford
quote:
Originally posted by PaULiN0
Its my 2nd year in and I know about theory. Not all my instruments and synths have be in the same key. Some are and some aren't if you take another listen if you mind almost everything is spanning dif keys form one scale because I try to make it interesting as possible.. I listen to your stuff and you know you damn well sound everyone tries to sound like. Very generic, with hardly anything going on. You should try to make switch to europop no? its real simple . Um, sorry i dont want to sound harsh either but take it for my example. I still have a long way to go and its not there's a deadline and i need to switch genres immediately like you advised. I'm here to stay, thanks.
you sound like a petulant child. lolz.
no more responses for you
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Apr-28-2014 18:35
PaULiN0
Twinkle, Twinkle..
Registered: Mar 2014
Location: Outer Space
quote:
Originally posted by optik
you sound like a petulant child. lolz.
no more responses for you
I knew you would revert to say something like that on which you can't back up on your own songs. I feel thankful for you not to want to respond to any of my snips because your overall take on the trance genre is like what was said about you, generic. Have a nice day.