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Here's a fun little tune I've been working on a little while...Think I might have posted it once before?
Got the mix pretty much to my liking...but I am dead stuck on arrangement...Simply no clue what to do after the melody ends, with nothing springing to mind.
Much sad, for as uplifting as this tune's trying to be.
Oh and yeah, that initial arp is supposed to border on the annoying side a little until everything kicks in. Maybe a subconscious nod to Tiesto's suburban train perhaps...
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Ok...going to be a little defined and critical because this track deserves it.
First off The Arp....So the first introduction to this Arp is nice. I like the delay and unsure if that is a cutoff filter or notch/auto filter but it is fine, actually dig the distorted feel. Suggestion, EQ it and give it some mids. It needs some body now. I wouldn't cross into sub level but just something to give it some depth. Also, one good way of bringing that in is automation on like a 3 band basic EQ. Start the automation High and automate the mids in. Same technique can be utilized with the delay to that Arp. Delay>Feedback>Automate dots at 0 & 35 (or whatever you want it to be)
I am only mentioning this because this also ties in with your composition.
See, If you use automation on multiple parts at once, you can blend and extend the pattern you are creating without it getting old and stale (in & Out, Overlapping, All parts at the same time. Depends on your creative). However in this case it is the opposite. I feel sorta rushed and then I feel stale,then rushed and then stale. So, one of my rule of thumbs now are 8-10 second intervals max before introducing something new until, the chorus. I break everything up into sections and try to follow the one minute mark for Intro.
In this case you have a Kick that starts on the 15 second mark. Suggestion: Using the same technique above using automation Auto Filter>Automation>115hz>19.9kHz and extend your kick out a little while giving it time to build up. This Kick desperately needs some bottom end. And, you (yep,once again) could implore the same EQ Filter automation and build that from a flat kick until a break and then BOOM!EQ3>Gain Low>-35.0dB>Automate>)0dB (or your desired)
Moving to your first real movement around the 30 second mark. Again, with the intention of building , it is my preference to actually try to stay away from any kind of cymbal work in an Intro. My reasoning is based on being a percussionist. Cymbals are the primary accompaniment, they add swing and the add body to that swing and can easily be built upon. Introducing them to soon takes away from the tension you should be trying to achieve in a build and eventually a drop.
47 seconds. Love it...
00:01:00 - Bass line needs sub. At least an Octave lower to get that boom. Wouldn't hurt to throw on some Compression and sidechain that to your Kick to get that pulse rolling. Plus, it will bring out that Kick a LOT more
00:01:13-15 - Uh yea! Emphasize that break, big time!
00:01:31 - "The Pads are coming! The Pads are coming!" Suggestions. Take those chords. Take your lead note ( G? ) and place another note an octave below your already lowest note in every chord. This will build also to your bottom end.
I like the tonality. I believe it may be a tad bit to loud. I would also , yet again like to see more build. Those automation techniques work just as good on pads,especially the auto filter
Dig the break at your two minute mark. Suggestion : I would began starting at this point that you use this area to build yet another tension part and drop. You can achieve this by extending that first note (that G ) and nothing else fading it out or at least to a much lower volume in order to bring in the Lead you actually start with at 00:02:45. It would be a great introduction to what is coming up and you could add like a rolling snare behind it with some sweeps and a riser leading straight into your full swing pattern and lead appearing again.
Lead suggestion : A few notes were odd note signatures,might want to check that.
Man...this has a TON of potential and you are right there, I totally see where you are with it and where it can go. This can't be left undone. Please finish and post updates,very seriously want to see it's development
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Phil
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