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I have added the portamento on bassline and widen stereo picture as Storyteller suggested. Thanks, it's much better now. Also did some vocal cleaning and changed drums, but they are still simple. I really suck with drums.
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Better groove and alignment with the vocals on this pass. Lotta potential here, and I dig the throwback vibe. Drums seem ok to me.
2 mildly unpleasant frequency spikes in the track at 7khz, and 16khz. One from vocoder (7khz) and the other from what I gather is the bell-synth in the back. 4-6db cut with a 5Q bell curve @ 7khz on the vocals would probably do the trick.
In agreement with SystematicX1 on the feedback for this one musically. At about 1:47, even while passively listening I felt..."I need a break from this vocodor". It's neat, I dig it...but I think musically, the track would benefit from your standard lead-ins and breaks.
Of course, it's your arrangement and I respect that...So this'd merely be an arrangement suggestion you could try on a totally separate save file of this track.
The intro is probably interesting enough to hold it's own until around 30-60 seconds in. Could get the full 60 seconds with a little variation in the instrumental, and that'd also be around your typical lead-in time for a mix.
The lead-in cue at 1:02 is also already present in the track, so it'd be as simple as shifting the vocals over to start them there. Then use the vocals to introduce the groove at 1:33 and take them away again to let the groove, groove for a bit there (It's a nice groove...), then...bring back the vocals around 2:02.
Breaks and variation are important to a listening experience, even a passive one...Else the ears/brain will start to tire of whatever they're listening to. I think generally speaking, once every 2 full measures is when listeners expect some kinda change to occur. Not a hard and fast rule, but it's worth keeping the listener's expectations in mind.
Hope that helps! Best of luck with this one!
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